This may be the first one I have posted in here, I can't remember. I have many poems under my bed but have always been nervous to show them. Regardless, tell me what you think of this one, be honesty. I need Contructive critism and stuff, not something my mom would say. haha, unless you actually like it. Its basically about my over anaylzing brain and looking for a girl to ease my mind so that I can feel comfortable to fall in love. Randomness fills my head as I continue to sort through the thoughts that fill my brain. A large swirling frenzy of ideas morph into something beautiful only to be met by incoming thoughts of confusion. Where do I go from there? Can you help me ease my mind? Or are you just another fickle face, ready to send my mind into overdrive? Multiple scenarios fill my head for every action I have taken. All of them seem plausible, nothing impossible maybe its to abrupt? Tell me! edit: I actually switched poems, like this one a little better. Its not my best by far, but oh well. maybe I'll post more
it's not bad, but could use more description. try showing what you want to get across as apposed to telling it
