bubble-gum goes pop

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by hnugginbuggin, Mar 26, 2005.

  1. hnugginbuggin

    hnugginbuggin Member

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    she sits there

    over yonder, on the concrete pavement.
    blissfully pondering the undertones
    and overtones
    of herself


    she knows things--holds
    immensely unconceivable knowledge
    pure in thought and grace
    she wades
    in waters so deep, now.

    she thinks to herself
    'a half-cup of sugar in my shallow sea...'

    sometimes she likes
    to put little stars on her cheek
    "come on boy, just a little peek?"
    butterflies are her thing
    and cracker box rings

    she knows
    it's hopless
    with the absense of wings
    the road to heaven is nothing but air
    so she packs her bags-she's goin to the fair

    she likes
    to see the crunched face of the little piggyz
    and she likes to pet the bunnies,
    but only the floppy-eared kind.


    she fondles the thin strands of her hair
    with fingers to match
    and thinks to herself...

    in an equilibrium separate
    from her and
    the outsiders
    she longs for the
    in-between times, the distance between
    the paint and the canvas,
    her love
     
  2. hnugginbuggin

    hnugginbuggin Member

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    i was stoned and wanted to capture a fickle, fushia-colored, spunky spirit with words....

    @
     
  3. KittenX

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    Well ya certainly captured something! I enjoyed this dizzy ride.
     
  4. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    i love this, yes... kittenx is right, it is dizzying.

    bubble gum goes pop... so perfect. :)
     
  5. hnugginbuggin

    hnugginbuggin Member

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    THANX GUYS!!:D [​IMG]
     
  6. Rafaela

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    This reminds me of a girl, who i imagined knew all the answers to life's mysteries but she just sat there while "she fondles the thin strands of her hair
    with fingers to match
    and thinks to herself..."

    A shy timid girl i've seen.
     
  7. TomDijon

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    i really liked the last part. i gotta ask though, why only the floppy eared kind?
     
  8. hnugginbuggin

    hnugginbuggin Member

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    cuz their the cutest of course...so relaxed and well, cute.:)
     
  9. skyfire

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    i really enjoyed the style of this one...it flowed so well and the imagry was amazing...
     
  10. TomDijon

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    i'd imagined she would be beyond just the cliche cute. seemed to me like the type that would appreciate the beauty even in imperfections
     
  11. hnugginbuggin

    hnugginbuggin Member

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    nobody's perfect.
     
  12. Sabel

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    wow. that's some great poetry!
     
  13. hnugginbuggin

    hnugginbuggin Member

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    thanx Sabel....i wrote all the poems that i posted in this forum about 4-5 years ago, except 'wreckage'...i finally picked up a pen and jotted sumthin down a week ago...tell me what you think....????
     
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