Quite an image! Four lines and in them distilled something as hard as experience and intangible as the human psyche.
Loved it to pieces...though some of the punctuation bothered me a bit, I think you should make this as one sentence. Short but punchy and oh so true.
Thank you. I was going to fix the punctuation, but it didn't seem right for some reason. I wrote this when I was at work months ago.
