idk y i wrote this, is it crap? just another day in life, just the usual, pain and strife. will i pull through? why should i go on? i learned a valuble lesson just the other day, with you i am safe, you are my escape, i belong under your wing. when i am with you i forget about my pain, i nolonger hear angry voices shreaking my name, when with you i am free, with you i am home... once i leave you the monsters break loose, the storms arise, hell is free, i am alone in myself, i only survive because i have memories of you and know i will see you again, when i am with you... so how is it? does it suck?
It was only semi-crappy until the last stanza... then it turned into a muddy pile of shit. Sorry but I aint gonna lie.
for starters....dont label the beginning of every one of your poems with a spout of self-deprecation...its not necessary, not attractive, not going to help your poem, nor is it particularly healthy then, take everything sir rubin and soulrebel say with a grain of salt...if you bother to read their comments at all. always rude and rarely constructive.
