I want you, hate you, love you

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Burn, Apr 20, 2005.

  1. Burn

    Burn Member

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    i want you, want you, distorted
    myriad, my precious reflections.

    you've got blood on your hands,
    your hair is soaked,
    trailing me step by step into the....

    i hate you, hate you, sleepy
    flowers, my despisable friends.

    you've got sinister grip,
    and it burns like yesterday's skin.

    i love you, love you, pretty
    sky, my only outlet in this relentless
    pilgrimage into the.....

    keep the ship, i've got the sails,
    timely ditch, if all else fails!
     
  2. browneydgrl

    browneydgrl Member

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    oh this i like. the way you set it up is fantastic, and the ambiguity of it all only adds to its mystery...and yet the emotion in it is recognizable... weeeiiiirrd :p

    nice work. i shall read it again. :D
     
  3. KarmaComa

    KarmaComa Member

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    I really like this. First one that got me in a while...
     

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