if you dont like it please tell me, wouldnt give me any grief

Savior
You can not save me
I have to save myself
Please it would be a waste of time
I am not like anyone else

You can try, I will listen to your words, can make me smile for a while, until it sucks me in and gets worse

Maybe I am just making life hard then what it really seems to be, doesn't help much tho when you feel your the Black Sheep

Ba-Ba Black sheep have you any wool?
I've got plenty, want to take a spool of thread and knit a sweater out of me?

I'm 50,000 feet buried under ground, feel that I have sunken 50,000 more sometimes when your around

I know I can survive in this decision making land, just stop your rule and grisp my power i'll try to help you understand

Not sure what I want to do, your guidance is helpful would like to Thank You
The clock is ticking, yes I know
Clock is ticking, its time for me to go

 

I like it, but poems shouldn't be so ADD. Don't think you have to include every idea in a single poem -- you have material here for a lot of good ones. Work on continuity and allow your words to meld together.

 

I'm sorry, but you lost me in the first two lines with the heavy biblical tone.

 

It was alright. if I were you, I would work on it a little more cause, its got potenetial. Some of the lines were right on!