she plays with hearts like skipping stones little girl by the side of the road waiting for them to find her heaven knows they're supposed to chase her when she runs but after a while they give up no more little girl she hides from their words but now a woman emerges from the bed covers daddy and mommy are gone she plays with hearts like skipping stones which one can fly the farthest? she tries to make it last until one by one all her thoughts they all eventually sink away wilting away with the seasons
i agree...thats wonderful for 14. i thought i had a handle on it until the last few lines, and it seemed to change somehow or veer onto a different path. could just be me, though.
Well done, for any age~! One suggestion would be to combine some of the last lines, taking out some of the wordy parts. until one by one all her thoughts eventually sink away wilting with the seasons
