Tell me what you think...

Ive grown tired of myself
I need someone else
to be there when my skin is rusted

Pull my brain off the shelf
watch as someone else
tears away the one I trusted

As I watch the waves
I can see your face
brutally battered
my heart was the only thing shattered

Now Ive come to the point
my feet at the tip
ready for my mind to flip

Im sorry to disapoint
I cant let you slip
but my mind has already ripped

As I watch the waves
I can see your face
brutally battered
my mind the only thing shattered

I cant feel or touch
see or blush
but all i know is she is the one for me

Now I kneel in the dust
feel her clutch
as she takes me away from me

As I watch the waves
I can see your face
brutally battered
my soul the only thing shattered

 

wow, this feels heartfelt. lovely repetition of the word 'shattered' very effective.

 

Why thank you Loki. I love writing when I need to get something off my chest, I felt better the second I started putting my feelings to words.

 

me too.

(tis lozi btw, not loki)

 

sorry bout that.

 

that's ok

 

i love these lines... very solemn and beautiful!

you've got skillz

 

Your to kind. really!

 

lots of emotion in this. i must confess i related rather disturbingly to it. thanks for posting, shaba.