DopeSickKid's Poetry

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by sylvanlightning, Aug 12, 2004.

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  1. thrawn

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    You sound pretty dramatic. Like my younger sister.
     
  2. Nathan11

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    Hey DSK, I really like a lot of you work.
    We haven't talked in a LONG time.
    Sorry about that.
    I just wanted to tell you, keep on writing.

    And Raving Sultan, you're FUCKING SICK!
     
  3. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    on the whole i like it all, but if i could offer one bit of advice is not to mass produce...and really refine the poems you have, no matter how old they are, keep working on them untill you cant do anything more...

    also try writting about a variety of thigns, even if they dont work out completely, be it a washing machine or something crazy, but just try and write about as much as you can, it'll really benefit your serious writting

    oh and read! read read read read everything you can, assimilate knowladge...

    ok thats 3 bits of advice but stil! poetry is evolution afterall

    keep up with the good work
     
  4. thrawn

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    All your poems sound the same.
     
  5. thrawn

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    Wow, you really are thirteen.
     
  6. crummyrummy

    crummyrummy Brew Your Own Beer Lifetime Supporter

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    I knew your were gay!!! thats cool.....
     
  7. thrawn

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    Hah, just what I think. All Im saying is he really is thirteen.
     
  8. MoonjavaSeed

    MoonjavaSeed Yeah, Toast!

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    my god i really enjoyed that, dopesickkid. hahaha :eek:
     
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    All your work is great! I wish I had found and outlet for all my pain when I was 13, I just used alot of drugs and cried myself to sleep (if I could sleep), When I found writting was a way to let out my emotions I felt freed from the pain as I wrote, I can feel that freedom in your work. Let it out and someday you'll make it to a fucked up 26 like me but let me tell you a little secret: as you let out the pain the idea for death being grand doesnt exsist anymore and that baby thats what its all about Keep writting, we need your kind of honesty to keep us grounded
     
  10. thrawn

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    Hes a stupid emo bitch.
     
  11. Orsino2

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    lovely...
     
  12. purcolekraze

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    sounds like you have alot to say...maybe you need someone to talk to, have you considered counseling?
     
  13. joker

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    You sure as hell have picked the perfect age to start writing poetry. Keep it up you might be famous some day. Right on man!
     
  14. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    Forever You Will Be.
    Forever In My Apathy.
    Your In My Rearview Mirror.
    As I See Things Cleaer.
    Im Somthing You Will Never Be.
    Happy.
    _______________

    Really liked this last part. ty~*
     
  15. Candle

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    ^Words to live by.

    A.M.A.Z.I.N.G. poetry!
     
  16. Nathan11

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    Now you see here?
    That's good.
    And it's happy.
    And what is this? Do I sense some LOVE?!
    :D
    Good job, bro.
     
  17. BlackGuardXIII

    BlackGuardXIII fera festiva

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    To all who've been truly, unduly, and cruelly afflicted..
    Who must now adjust to their trust being busted.
    Whose drive to survive kept alive, though convicted.
    Who flee, and steal meals, to be free of who lusted.

    On the bittersweet street, they meet with deceit.
    Get smart, with scarred, torn apart hearts in retreat.
    Mistreated, do what's needed so to see no repeat.
    Incomplete, feeling cheated they're beat by the heat.

    Who long to belong, you were done wrong all along .
    The swan song is that you get strong as King Kong.
    Aware of the nightmare, you're too scared to care.
    You dare to repair the glaring despair.
    Okay that is all for now.
     
  18. Nathan11

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    Yeah, that was far-out, man.
     
  19. BlackGuardXIII

    BlackGuardXIII fera festiva

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    I am not totally happy with it and will do some clean up at some point.
    I just felt like writing it cuz I was inspired by you. All the things you have already learned at such a young age.... it is a real benefit for your future, and an advantage that will be valuable in the workplace. Unfortunately, nearly all the people I know who were so savvy so young had to pay quite a heavy price for it.
    "The best steel comes from the hottest fire."
    "No rain makes a desert."
    "You can't teach experience, which gives you good judgement. So how do you get experience? Bad judgement."
    "In theory there is no difference between practice and theory, but in practice there is."

    I don't know if any of those quotes are meaningful to you, but I have always liked them. Oh ya, one more.
    "You never need to explain yourself, cuz your friends don't need an explanation, and your enemies won't believe you anyway. If your friends don't mind, your enemies don't matter."
     
  20. Jack_Straw2208

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    thank you VERY much.
     
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