3:43

I lie on my dull azure floor,
Staring into my pure white ceiling.
A glance is stolen towards the door;
Something outside it stirs a smoldering feeling.
Disconnection.

A unifing vortex of seggregation and conformity,
Swallows the initial nature of spirituality.
A lacerating sensation of isolation, intrudes deep.
There are no tears left to weep.
Fatigue.

Born into this bewildering existance to live;
Unable to perceive the underlying fib.
Die or let die, shed this weakness.
Crawl away from this crippling affliction; witness:
Addiction.

Desire for a sacred reformation, eventually broken;
Primitive tendency surpasses all logical intervention.
Conquered yet not purged, the grudge appears;
Fabricated by compulsory desires, spiraling into fear.
Dillusion.

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Word count = 112; 28 words per stanza. (*Note*: the Fibacci Spiral, a mathmateical pattern, is related to the "Golden Mean Spiral;" the pattern is: 0, 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8... add the previous number on to the present one and you get the next number.)

Written with a mere 2 hours of sleep somewhere among over 72 hours of insomnia. You see, 7, is an uncanny number in my life. 3 days; each one, I stared at the clock at 7 A.M. If your a math wizz or something, you probably already made the connection by now: 7^3 = 343. That is, 7 * 7 * 7; 7 * 7 = 49, 49 * 7 = 343. I wasn't fully aware of this significance at the time I gave the poem a title.

Anyway, I'm rambling; I'd appreciate feedback, positive or negative.

 

Ocean- I really liked the third stanza....definatley rad!...good work

"Born into this bewildering existance to live;
Unable to perceive the underlying fib.
Die or let die, shed this weakness.
Crawl away from this crippling affliction; witness:
Addiction."

 

Thanks Tye; it was my favourite too. The rhyme scheme in that particular stanza is unique.

 

that is pretty radicla!!!!!

amazing .

it sounds.. delicous to say as well. due to the maths i expect. gorgeous word use...yum yum yum

 

i like the whack scheme and the context in which you wrote the poem more so than th actualy piece. It's brilliant but i was not completely captured by its flow. cheers dont get me wrong it's wonderful