cosmic car journey, feedback welcomed!!

I found the universe today,
the stars in their black
endless river sparked
out from their shadows
under grey looking skies.
That prism of globeness
radically sang.
Saying, 'I am just a dream'

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From this well of my own loneless,
comes the reach over our edge.
My heart is a void and the things
I've thought are true must speak.

 

cars? crumbs. wow...short and sweet. i am liking this piece muchly. keep up the good work

 

I loved this piece. Made me feel like I was out staring and dreaming myself.

 

beautiful, only complain is that I want more!

 

Agreed. Short and sweet, with a lingering taste.

 

thanks for the comments! maybe its good short becuase there asnt anything else i had to say