the apple goddess, her body’s shining. an ivory fairy. their tongues meet tongue touch, secrets and feathers. heaven is full of vanilla skies. laughing. the sun’s made of jellybears. a beast on motorcycle pass. electric genies. feathers and bruises. a water kitten. moonkisses. your lips, the creamiest chocolate street. fear and factories. dancing in the streets. all around us it’s pleasure. boy from the memories, worshiped cigarettes. loving streets and a dreaming, weeping Buddha. the apple goddess, dressed into crying desire and fragrance.
This doesn't make any sense to me. Apparently someone's kissing? Seems like a bunch of random adjectives thrown together in short lines, sounding poetic, but meaning nothing. I'm totally lost on this one. Your poems are usually pretty good too, so I'm pretty confused. Maybe I'm just missing something.
thanks for praising me Keramptha..really nice of u TrippinBTM, don' think poetry always are gonna be understanable...it's nearly like my typing what?(*laughing*) I just wanted to try to make images and put them together to a story...but i guess i maybe went a little too deep for you at a point? Osiris, a i like that way of saying it...thanks luv, cassi
I personally loved it. I get flashing images of moments, like rewinding what happened at the end of a day. Only thing is the "a" should be "an" instead. It comes before a vowel. Damn stupid tricky english with too many exceptions. I'm still always blown away by how well you write in english because the quality of what you post is terrific stuff all in all. Makes me wish I could read/understand what you write using your first language.
Sorry if I sounded mean or harsh, I just don't see it as a cohesive set of ideas. By the way, poetry should be understandable; otherwise, what's the point? Sorry again if I sound judgemental, just stating my opinion here, not trying to be an asshole.
I didn't think so. Different kinds of writing suits different people. Lots of people don't like the abstract, just like tons of people can't stand abstract kinda jazz.
thanks kim you are always so nice to me...*lol*..well you better start learning norwegian then or what(if u want to read my norske poems..*giggles*) TrippinBTM, i understood that u didn't mean to b mean or something...everybody got different tastes...and this wasn't actually the type of poetry you like, or? luv, Cassi
LOL, maybe if Iget those tapes you are supposed to listen to when you are sleeping...otherwise I'm doomed never to learn norwegian. Do you write poetry in german too? I know you aren't fond of german (ranks right above math right?) so I doubt it.
*lol*..german poems????? no..my german is that bad that my poems would sound like..god knows..all i know is it wouldn't sound too good. ah, how could you guess that german is ranked right above math???? i'm impressed of you mumy I may go to german this holiday though..visiting a friend, hopefully she'll learn me a lot what? maybe I come home talkin' just german to you? ah, you can learn norwegian if you want to..i'm sure of it..i learned a lot of english because i wanted to learn it...and if i want to learn german..i know i can, and one day i hopefully will... have a good day mumy...i'll talk to you soon, ok? luv, cassi
