lost

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by mysti, Jun 15, 2005.

  1. mysti

    mysti Member

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    lost and fading,
    broken and bleeding,
    this is what you did to me.

    hopless and lonely,
    deceived and fallen,
    i smile on the outside so nobody see's the hurt beneath the skin.

    wounded and dieing,
    praying and screaming,
    this is all your fault.

    you sit over there with all of your friends,
    and you dont even care or think of me,
    you just placed me beside you to replace her,
    how could you do this to me?

    your smile was all that mattered,
    but now it must fall.
    you are nothing but a wall in my lifes pathway.


    do you guys like it or not? ive written better...
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    yeah mysti i like this one,i'd love to see more of your work. this piece is very broken hearted, very sad, but tis a good write
     
  3. joker

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    i dig it. i've gotten my heart broken once and gotten drunk and cried over it. my ex just went on about her life wit no problem. her life consisted of happiness while i suffered with sorrow. post some more writings. i'd like to read more of ure shit.

    JOker
     
  4. mysti

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    thanks... srry abt ur past joker... love is a bitch...all relationships suck as simple plan would put it...
     
  5. joker

    joker Senior Member

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    i can't argue with u on that one. i haven't had a gf in 2 years. it seems like all the time i've spent in solitary over the past few years has perished my knowledge on how to express my feelings towards a woman that I like without scaring her off. i've thought of ways of having a better understanding of society is by going to a coffee shop and just written down my thoughts of the peoples personality traits around me. some say i got a weird way of thinking. lol.
     
  6. mysti

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    well screw what ''other people'' think... best wishes to u on finding another g/f
     

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