Hey, just finished this one, hope to get some feedback. Not sure if I like the final couplet, but I gotta get to work (I'm about to be late, haha) and wanted to post it. Title suggestions welcome too! =============================== A day ago I battled with despair as fields of clover, dancing in the air and blooming white like fragrant summer snow with rain-fed grasses swaying to and fro Came face to face with whirling death by blade as industry marched angry through that glade the darker side of life had shown it's face and ravaged through the beauty of that place And later when the mowers job was done the cuttings left to wither in the sun I wondered why in all the things we know is nothing in this world allowed to grow But now I meet redemption in a songbird her grass filled beak shows life is undeterred
This is lovely, very well written, it flows really well! I like the last couplet, it seems like a good ending, quite final
