Brainwashing

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Angel of Avalon, Jun 27, 2005.

  1. Angel of Avalon

    Angel of Avalon Member

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    Quick!
    Step in line
    Keep the rythm, keep the time
    Follow orders on command
    Keep the children close at hand
    Fill their minds with new found theories
    Educate them on the countries worries
    As the youth come of age
    A new found feeling we call rage
    Swells the heart and breaks the spirit
    I am done
    I dont want to hear it
    What ever happend to loving mankind?
     
  2. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    It's good but I don't like the ending line, doesn't work well with the rhythm of the poem
     

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