To you or to me, is there one that can help me

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Icurus, Jul 9, 2005.

  1. Icurus

    Icurus Member

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    And I touched the hearts of many,
    with little effort I swore a pact, with one, or any,
    to attempt the venture to show that your not alone,
    or maybe, and more honest to myself, or to myself show
    it's me, that all things I've wrote, that all I've said, to me,
    I my self I needed to have shown, that it was me all along,
    that was not alone.......

    Peace Writer's,
    Devon Knight ~
     
  2. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    Good idea, interesting message but with some awkward wording or maybe too wordy in some places where it could have been pared down.
     
  3. *electrica*

    *electrica* Member

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    I personally love the awkward wordiness. I thought that was the point. I really like poetry that's just fun to say, and this one definitely is. It's a beautiful message too. Maybe I'm just sleepy, or maybe this is going to be one of my favourite poems.
     
  4. Icurus

    Icurus Member

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    Thank you both very much,
    I can get caught up some times, and
    some may say I ramble, but this was
    what it was, "It is what it is", as all my
    posts are, I miss a lot of thee older writers
    that use to frequent the forum, and a lot of
    them inspired me, I miss saying hi, I miss them
    saying "hi" to me, so I felt alone, it's not like a number
    you can call them up and verbalize the fore mentioned.
    So, it was in this I was saying it was all my friends that
    still!, not present, they still inspired me, they inspired me
    to realize I was alone!.......

    Peace,
    Devon Knight ~
     
  5. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    Yes, Devon, it is often indeed that we find that we write as much for our own future understanding as for the sake of presently sharing or impressing others. We are, in this sense, our own oracles. I clink now my beer to the screen and say:

    Cheers to Devon!
     
  6. Icurus

    Icurus Member

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    Hey Osiris,
    First!, thanks for letting me know the URL (Yours) was
    correct.
    What kind of beer?.......... ") Just seeing where
    I stand in the scheam(sp?) of things...
    Thanks for coming around, always a pleasure to hear
    from you, your one of few that seem to grasp my meaning
    in most my words, and your replies seem to carry the same
    flow, for lack of a better word.
    I crashed around 1am, up at 2am, and sat thru "The Door's"
    and watched the sun come up, I recommend the flick highly,


    "Out here in the perimeter there are no stars, out
    here, we is stoned imaculate" J. Morrr.

    Now pop a fresh one and kick! Later Rommi,
    Devon Knight ~
     
  7. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    Tecate. Mexican for: Better than American Beer. lol.
     
  8. Icurus

    Icurus Member

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    I spent a week in Ensanada, Mx. and although we, me and
    4 friends brought with us, 10 cases of Budwieser, we went
    thru that all to quick, and it was "Tecate" for like three days,
    on the last night there, I was up all night selling BBbuuiiccckkssss's (Buick's)
    in the john, LOL.
    But if you like it, then I'll concider it a compliment!
    Peace my brother.......
    Dev ~
     
  9. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    I'll offer a toast with my bottle of Guinness,
    to your heartfelt post, brother Devon.
     
  10. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    *tips her summer ale in y'all's direction*
    Much enjoyed the read and we are all alone but not. ~*cheers!*~
     
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