Asylum Innards

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Ceo, Jul 5, 2005.

  1. Ceo

    Ceo Member

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    Alone these words shrivel into the disquiet, this a life of infirmity and premature astheny

    Destitute of effable feelings, a solitary actuality of no skies only ceiling

    The dark (is) not what scares me
    It’s the possibility of something there that I can’t see

    Enameled to serve a purpose, subjugated from the world I disaffect and contemplate if living is worth this

    The dark (is) not what scares me
    It’s the possibility of something there that I can’t see

    From the melanoid intestines of this building resonates a deep noise, at night these feelings beat me for there joy

    Sentiency of deepened animosity, convulsing at the sight of these atrocities

    The dark (is) not what scares me
    It’s the possibility of something there that I can’t see
    The dark (is) not what scares me...

    This padded cell can only keep me warm until the end of this song, my
    cessation I will no longer prolong
     
  2. Ceo

    Ceo Member

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    I've had like 23 views and no replies lol. Any comments?
     
  3. Gregonzo

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  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    You won't tend to get replies from folks 'round here that probe those parts of themselves they'd rather not face. Which is quite harmonious with your piece, don't you think?
     
  5. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    This Astheny of Asthenia without the si is Athena
    and She of golden owl song would seek to call
    you from these disquieting dreams of no Self.
    Awake and realize that you are God/dess.
     
  6. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    man, this is a killer work, I can relate the the feelings, the tone of it. Not always but now and then I can sink rather low. Anyways, good job, liked the repetition, though I'm not sure I like the way it ended. But I guess that's just me.
     
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