Am G Dm Am You shine so bright that I can’t take my mind off you Am G Dm Am All night, it’s so right. So how can you say its wrong? Am G Dm Am I want you to hear me, I need you to know my heart Am G Dm Am I swear that I love you, and I don’t ever want to part Am Dm G Am I know that you’re going but you mean so much to me Am Dm G Am I hope that one day you will come home with me You came like the sunrise bright and full of cheer Now I see the nightfall cold and full of tears You say you can’t stay it hurts to think of this You know if you go my life will be meaningless I know that you’re going but you mean so much to me I hope that one day you will come home with me Now the rain will fall it running on down my face Hear me while I cry no one can take your place I am yours are you mine its something Ive got to know Kiss me one more time before you have to go
nothing wrong with it, I just think it sounds sort of cliche. But then again, I have natural adversity towards love songs.
Adds are too long and louder then regular programming, although the powers that be don't admit it. How's that?
i'd revise the first verse--its way too cliche. also, don't just strum the chords. use those chords as the backbone of the sound. when you go to record it, instead of just vocals, strumming guitar, bass and drums, layer it. make guitar and/or keyboard melodies and harmonies thicken up the chords, and leave space in the song, so as to not make it another bland pop statement. an otherwise boring song with a few chords can really be made interesting by layered composition. as far as just a singer/songwriter thing to perform at coffeshops and stuff, it's probably fine. i'd have to hear it, but that first verse just sounds so typical of a pop love song.
