New Poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Moonlight Mile, Aug 2, 2005.

  1. Moonlight Mile

    Moonlight Mile Member

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    This is a new poem/song, I have been working on with a few friends. Give me some insite on what you think.



    A bird, sat on a fence
    Poor bird had lost his sense
    His wings, and things
    Got lost from site,
    He tired to see but the smoke couldn't clear

    Meanwhile, man was stoned
    All his senses began to drone
    He took a hit, tried to sit
    He fell to earth
    Got forced through rebirth

    When the bird realised
    What his mind and eyes
    Forgot to see, what he could be
    The bird, remembered he was man
    But couldn't comprehend
     
  2. citrus_seas

    citrus_seas Senior Member

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    Awesome poem man, I like the symbolism.
     
  3. Brand New Soul

    Brand New Soul Senior Member

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    Awsome poem/song!!!
     

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