Chatoyant Lips

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by EternalHunter, Aug 15, 2005.

  1. EternalHunter

    EternalHunter Member

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    I gave the faded luster
    three kisses for buena suerte,
    and retreating sway down
    dark lanes refrained from
    my reaching fingertips.

    So lips are the curve?
    Mathematical solution
    to all philosophical questions
    and burgundy ruminations?
    Well opacity in the insecure
    is deeper than those
    curls of orange peel that
    knife whittled free.
    I curve obtuse, it's true.

    Sparks are born before fire.
    A dusk of beaded syncronicity,
    but the texture is so uncertain--
    I thought

    Moss! with that
    fluffy spring and compression,

    Wood? with a hardness of
    petrified bone bleached by sun;

    but as the face of such refracting light
    reached away from my eyes
    I knew it's disguise.
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    yet another stellar piece... love the language in this one; the questions and the reflections. the second stanza I find especially powerful... all types of lovely things pop up in my mind :)
     
  3. EternalHunter

    EternalHunter Member

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    I did as you suggested and chopped off the loitering last line. You were right, it definetley feels more obscure and open now. Thanks, and enjoy those lovely things...:)
     
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