I wrote this after my gf broke up with me after 5 months. I loved her with everything I had. To clarify, Time of your Life by Green Day was "our song" so hence the reference... --Have You Ever?-- Have you ever met someone who took your breath away Just to peel you limb from limb and take your life away Have you ever felt as if you're being torn apart You will never be the same, left with a broken heart Have you ever fallen for somebody mystical Just to find they're shallow, not even worth a nickel Have you ever seen in someone what no one else could Then stagger back and realize that that's not always good Have you ever awakened and thought what's done is done The only cloud in the sky is blocking out the sun Have you ever walked alone, content to stay as such Just to realize all you need's a kind and gentle touch Have you ever wondered why life has to be so cruel Fight and fight for what's closest and still look like a fool Have you ever wished you could put an end to the strife Stopped and thought that there is no truth to Time of Your Life Tell me what you think. It's my 57th poem actually but I thought it was pretty good so... Honest comments please!
that was my favorite part. this was well written, i liked the overall feel of the poem. keep progressing, i look forward to more!
:& Thanks! Interestingly enough, although I doubt many would naturally notice, each line contains exactly 13 syllables. Not sure why I did that but I guess it just came out that way.
i like it man. though i didn't notice the syllable count, it shows in the rhythm of the poem. good job
