Calling all artists - S.O.S?

So, I have been fighting with this painting for a couple months now. A day here, a day there.... and a brick wall was hit a long time ago. I am at a total stand still with it. I don't like where it is, I hate where it was, and i have no idea how to make it go somewhere I want it to go.

I rather like the subject matter, but the painting itself is wonky. Any advice on how to make it work?

 

I would just leave it a while, do something else and when you've stopped thinking about it go back and have a go again.

 

thats what I've done. I haven't look at this painting for a couple months... I am going to work with it today and see how it goes.

 

it needs a little more dimension.......

 

I did some work on it this week... still not done though... i think, but getting better, eh?

 

it looks much better now
I like that you made the yellow darker...it flows better with the green and red....if that made sense

 

it looks like you put up the first picture to only brag about the second picture i bet you did this on purpose. blalheha

Honestly it looks like the second should have been the first to begin with..

 

I honestly was stuck with the painting. I asked for help from fellow artists, because sometimes you just need a fresh pair of eyes. What did you mean by that last sentance fragment?

Do you always assume the worst of people or am I just special?

 

only 'artists' oh wait.. yea everybody

 

looks better in the second shot. In the first pic I covered the green part with paper and saw that it looked unfinished, kinda plain. then i covered the opposite end and saw that the green was very dominate but worked well with the yellow and the black outlines. even thought the 2nd pic looks better,...it still needs something to balance the green , or subdue it? what?..... i don't know. like Ashers said, come back to it later.

(hehehe) here's an easy escape,....make the green part of the painting the top, then sign your name in black at the bottom left (in the lighter yellow) for balance!? haha

Great work though! keep it going!

 

i really like it but imho i think the center is still off....
i suggest you stand back a bit and try to picture your self painting
only visualize it tho....see the colors flow and then get to it
duh i sound tarded but its something i do sometimes...
oh and i totally get you with sometimes you need a fresh pair of eyes....
i am guilty of that too

 

Bobby- Yeah, I know that it wasn't working vertically, which is why I moved it sideways... think it flows better on the side. I haven't touched it since Thursday, as I had a show this weekend, but I think I might spend some time with it Tuesday (tomorrow)... we'll see, as I have 2 other paintings blocked out and ready to go. The green does need to be a different tone though, I think you are right there.

CDD- The centre does need some definition to it... some deepening and clearer outlines. I get what you were saying about "seeing the colours" though... sometimes I sound all tripped-out-new-agey too... lol.

 

yea i don't often let myself describe things like that
most of my friends don't get that about me...lol

~Jaime

 

i really like it, the colors are gorgeous, but i feel like the green or orange needs to be echoed somewhere else in the painting. your eyes are sort of drawn to that one corner and they don't move around the painting like it should, which means people will sort of get stuck in the lower right hand corner where all of those great colors are and miss the rest of the painting. not really sure what you could do, maybe add some green or orange to the yellow in the opposite corner, that might balance it out some?!

i don't know, looks good though...

 

You know, I took some of my black hockey tape and framed your picture in black and it really toned down/subdued the strong green! If it's a picture that can be matted, try a black matt (about an inch or inch and a half border) If it's an oil painting, try a black metal frame. But, yeah...it really looked good with a black border. Good luck!

 

i'm just wondering, someones probably mentioned it, but - the centre of the peice the white centre seems so untouched i think it needs a more deffined focus point i think its all so merging together (its lovely the colours are gorgeous so don't think i dislike it) but looking into the centre i don't think i know whats quite happening there. do you work from real life plants? If you don't have you considered at looking at them for inspirational point of view?

but yeh! i think it deffinatly improved from the first photo you put up!

ps : if i sound up me own arse.. ignore me- don't mean to be... i'm trying to help!

 

that quite an erotic picture you got there...

 

What if I took some of the green (as mazzy said) and added it to the white centre nub (as Dandelion said)? Think that might work?

Bobby- it's acrylic on canvas, so i won't frame it... just edge it (i edged it in the dark green) and hang it on a nail. But, I think you might have given yourself away, as very few people have enough hockey tape laying around that they start to consider it as an artistic medium! Luckily, I have always considered hockey tape a viable medium... haha!

I just have to say that you guys rock... you have all given me so much constructive critism that I actually have a list of things to try! I will work on it tonight, and post the progress tomorrow!

P.S. the Dude - if you think that one is erotic, you should check out some of my other stuff... its in my gallery.

 

i think that idea could work! and maybe deepen that pale yellow space in the top left corner with a little orange, that would really make your eyes move around the space.

your work is beautiful, i love the sunset daisy in your gallery, the way you get the colors so glossy is really incredible...

best of luck!

 

Added some greens and yellows to the "central nub"... I don't know... think it might be too distracting now. ???