Crimson Paw

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by riptweasel, Oct 6, 2005.

  1. riptweasel

    riptweasel Member

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    tell me what you guys think. it's somewhat rare for me to rhyme in my poetry


    A diamond, shattered across the black,
    Shared its silent beauty with the night
    And with an old white wolf
    Who bathed in the diamond’s light.


    The old wolf’s paw held many lives
    Of many victims and foes defeated,
    And his heart was very heavy
    With the guilt of sins repeated.

    His mind burned with unwelcome rage.
    His heart cried out in pain.
    His eyes shed tears of blood
    For all the innocents slain.

    The constant reminders haunted him.
    The bloodstained paw and heavy heart.
    He sunk into the shadows
    And wandered alone in the dark.

    "Brothers and sisters fallen,"
    He whispered into shadow,
    "Please forgive this old wolf,
    And soon I will follow."

    "Soon my pain will end
    So that others may forget theirs.
    Let a new life replace mine,
    Led by someone who cares."

    "A young and kind pup.
    I wouldn’t mind this end.
    An old killer will die.
    A new life will begin."

    The shattered diamond faded.
    The sky became gray
    Before flooding with light.
    A brand new day.

     
  2. EmbraceInnerPeaches

    EmbraceInnerPeaches Member

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    wow thats awesome. great imagery. keep writing, its great!
     
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