Beauty super models so tall and so thin so superficial with airbrushed skin personality's out plastic surgery's in they call it beauty but i call it a sin give me a woman with her own look and style with big eyes, funny nose and a crooked smile a woman with curves to get lost in awhile a girl with some wit some brains and some guile because beauty will fade as the years pass by but personality stays and gets better with time inner beauty is free it's something you can't buy we all can be beautiful just give it a try
i'm still not sure if i like this... it was of my attempts to write something not so dark and depressing.
I liked it all except for the very last line, it just sounds kind of corny. But overall you do a good job expressing your message and the rhyme doesn't bog down.
i'd have to agree... the last line is my least favorite. i think i'll change it when i think of something better. thanks for the comments. namaste, doug
ok... i changed the ending... let me know if this is any better. Beauty super models so tall and so thin so superficial with airbrushed skin personality's out plastic surgery's in they call it beauty but i call it a sin give me a woman with her own look and style with big eyes, funny nose and a crooked smile a woman with curves to get lost in awhile a girl with some wit some brains and some guile because beauty will fade as the years pass by but personality stays and gets better with time inner beauty is free and it's not hard to find look past her skin and into her mind
i agree with sunfree. it was sweet, and cute, but not something you should ever give to a girlfriend...