WTF did I just type?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Imagine17, Oct 21, 2005.

  1. Imagine17

    Imagine17 Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    The Blacktop

    You can play tic tac toe on the black top.
    You can eat marshmallows on the black top.
    You can wait for your ship on the blacktop.

    Look beyond the candy mountains.
    Just around the crimson fountains.
    The mist always settles in the east where green mushrooms grow at night.
    Sit back and lounge , as the ships take flight.

    You can play the tuba on the blacktop.
    Can wonder off of the blacktop.
    Can ponder life off the blacktop.

    The bearded man always stands by the stream.
    Blue with white rocks and shiny bright beams.
    You stare as it were an endless abyss.
    But there is an end you see.
    A vortex tunnel to the steamy sea.

    You can jump in puddles on the blacktop.
    Have fear on the black top.
    Blow bubbles on the blacktop.

    Would your eye sink deeper into the text.
    Winding
    Grinding
    Down
    And down
    You sink
    Further
    Further
    Gasp now for the frosty air and take it in.
    Lay back in the marsh.

    You can break bones.
    You can get scrapes.
    Bumps and broken thumbs
    You can meet Beelzebub on the blacktop.

    There is no temptation through the abyss
    Just seldom mist in the green domain.
    You can sleep now.
    Rest your mind.​


    When you are high and have meditated the mind can work in odd ways.
     
  2. deep_poet86

    deep_poet86 Member

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    Nice work man, I feel the vibes ;)
     
  3. Major Peacenik

    Major Peacenik Member

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    hahahhahahhahahaha
     
  4. hippypaul

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    not bad! not bad at all
     
  5. soulrebel51

    soulrebel51 i's a folkie.

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    there were some things that just didnt fit, i think...whatsoever... like this:

    The bearded man always stands by the stream.
    Blue with white rocks and shiny bright beams.
    You stare as it were an endless abyss.
    But there is an end you see.
    A vortex tunnel to the steamy sea.


    and this:
    There is no temptation through the abyss
    Just seldom mist in the green domain.
    You can sleep now.
    Rest your mind.




    ???
     
  6. natural23

    natural23 Senior Member

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    Imagine17,


    Supreme, excellent, wonderfilled. Travelling from birth to death and back again, on the blacktop. Thank You.


    P/L,

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  7. Imagine17

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    Sadly, I can't answer that ...???...I feel the same way about most of it and am trying to make some sense out of it. I hardly remember posting it nevermind typing it. Hence the title WTF did I just type?
     
  8. hippie-McHipperson

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    thats some pretty cool stuff, I like the fact that it doesnt have a real set rythem or beat. It has a sort of sporadic flow.
     

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