ash against ascension

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by fulmah, Oct 21, 2005.

  1. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    what a bitter wine
    when midnight rolls by
    and metal dives
    and tides leak till sometime
    when blitzed by blackness, out.

    the chordal array hammers
    pleaded prayers; baby please,
    baby, no one compares

    and I'll die yeah,
    grieving in tunnel glow,
    traveling up pipe-organ notes,

    a burial ghost
    accompanying those
    purgatory froze.

    down halls, careless and airborne.
    mourning lily white, worn.
    memory echoes evermore.
     
  2. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    This is melancholy, elegant, brittle. First stanza is a great opener. Very smooth. Compact but effective. :)
     
  3. deep_poet86

    deep_poet86 Member

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    A really awesome name for a poem. The name cuaght my eye. I knew it would be a great poem after I read it. :)
     
  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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