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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by May Aizelle, Oct 29, 2005.

  1. May Aizelle

    May Aizelle Member

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    Fade to beauty
    fade to dreams
    fade to nothing
    fade it seems

    little needles
    poke and tear
    love and truth
    are never there

    solemn whispers
    night gone black
    raindrops shimmer
    beasts attack

    forever peaceful
    forever dead
    no one sleeps
    that hasnt bled

    blessed be winter
    cold in her heart
    she will be welcome
    to rip you apart

    shallow waters
    wash you clean
    bloody rivers
    drown your queen
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    i like your style
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    This was great. The first stanza really hooked me in. :)
     
  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    The cold of winter is the preparation of the Great Mother for the Intensity of the Sun. His raging Fire, even from afar, loosens Her Girdle. As He draws closer Her ice begins to melt, flowing into and rejuvinating Her Earth. Ah, but if people could follow Nature's example, and cease to resist this inevitability!
    She sees it not as a violation or fornication when He comes, nor does She seek to possess Him and hold Him fast when He goes. She goes Her own way in peace, assured of His return.
     
  5. Tigerbeam

    Tigerbeam Member

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    flows very smoothly, great job
     
  6. makno

    makno Senior Member

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    is this a smack poem ?
     
  7. May Aizelle

    May Aizelle Member

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    a what poem?
     
  8. makno

    makno Senior Member

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    ok its not .....ie poem about h
     
  9. LordHelmet

    LordHelmet Member

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    i really dig that line

    good stuff altogether
     
  10. cara27

    cara27 Member

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    i read the first line and had to keep going! Beautiful work..keep writing :)
     
  11. skyfire

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    yep...i loved it too...flows exceptionally
     
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