Let me know what you like or don't like...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by StonedRedhead, Oct 21, 2005.

  1. StonedRedhead

    StonedRedhead Member

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    Background: Written in Summer 2004. Husband left me for another.

    I have edited some language, not sure if it is allowed.


    little miss misery



    i miss kissing you...

    your slightly spicy lips

    mingling with mine

    the taste, the sweetness

    but i digress

    i miss your touch...

    your gentle hand caressing

    the small of my back

    now when it occurs, i tingle

    but again, i digress

    i miss sharing our bed...

    snuggling up to your chest

    you quietly reading to me

    that book, by that guy

    once more, i digress

    i miss you...

    every essence of who you are

    the life we shared

    the love, the elation

    i cannot digress

    so f**k you for leaving,

    ripping out my heart,

    kissing me goodbye.

    taking up with that c*nt.

    how dare you

    stop loving me

    when i can’t

    stop loving you







     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    loved the progression, and how, without going into great detail, an entire picture can be perceived. the raw edge at the end sums up a bad break-up perfectly; everything seems to be going well, then the world falls apart with an ugly, ethereal clarity. thanks for sharing this!

    and this is a free speech forum, may the profane reign :)
     
  3. Or's well

    Or's well Member

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    I like the flow of this poem, the return to "I digress", and the way that ending kind of jumps up and bites you on the ass.
     

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