In the Eye

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Burn, Nov 8, 2005.

  1. Burn

    Burn Member

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    Under the eye of a vicious smile,
    And I just can't tell.
    The fangs just sink in through the miles,
    What I'm doing and where I'm going,
    Doesn't matter,
    And nobody's knowing,
    My souls a'scatter,
    And the river's flowing.

    Pick my pieces up,
    down the banks of solitude,
    I'm a thousand in one,
    Like ripples sparkling under,
    Blue lit hues,
    Making one moment,
    In the eye of the beholder.
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    this is very much the scattered pieces of a persons life and them..picking up the pieces and moving their problesm with them.... in my opinion...nice write burn
     
  3. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Very tight concentrated images
    that sink right into you
    and start rippling,
    well done.
     
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