something that occured to me at twighlight

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Spyder, Nov 16, 2005.

  1. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    Day flees in the twilight,

    over hillsides

    ridden with roman suicides

    far to proud to live on.

    Edit: Cheers TrippinBTM for knoticing!
     
  2. Billie Spears

    Billie Spears Member

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    Simply beautiful...sometimes the fewer words the moe profound. Like a simple I love you, or thank you, or twilight
     
  3. Keramptha

    Keramptha Senior Member

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    thats a clever idea. its like saying that sunset was so magnificent it kills itself so that it wont stay to be....i dont know taken for granted!!
     
  4. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    ooh i do like the way you phrased that! :>
     
  5. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    spelling threw me off, i was thinking, what to fleas have to do with this? haha.

    Anyways, once my brain kicked into gear, it made sense and the beauty shone through. I like the simplicity which holds so much meaning. Nicely done.
     
  6. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

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    titing hell. what a retard i am, i didnt knotice that!
     
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