Hey hey, I posted a new poem

*go kill yourself*

 

paragraph...maybe not much anything elas.....

Why be an attention whore and post a link to a paragraph in a whole different section of the site?

Fuck, why not print as many copies as you can and hand them out in every major city while you ponder the next paragraph.

 

i think its ok.. but yeah you should change the structure .. like sumthing like this

I met you in an antique shop,
covered in cracks and dust.
Benevolent in nature;

I felt my pulse quicken whence
brushing my fingers across
your shattered surface.

Overwhelmed,
I sank to my knees,
staring at your face.
Was it my imagination,
or did you open
your eyes to me?

I felt like no one,
and everyone to you.
How can something
so beautiful be made of stone?

I left you there in that shop,
and as I walked away,
I felt my heart break.

 

much better

 

You know 6peace, if you didn't like what I have to write, that's fiine, but you're just plain rude.


Thank you for the suggestion Batmannu.

 

You remind me of the main girl in the movie "Online"...

Grrrrrr...