the first one is new, the second one although old goes with the first quite nicely I believe but I wouldn't combine them into one I don't think. She bleeds the colors of the sun and will send your mind to a dizzying climax and strike at your most vulnerable with a certian sting in her actions marks varying like the rings of saturn unable to detect till the bitter end when all your left with is your sorrow to drown in the blue colored shadows cast indifference on her face but I can tell she is blushing clutching the remains of sanity as the wolves feast on her anguish and spit out the remains ten fold magnified by the spirits of deciet who breath sympathy but bathe in the defeat
mmm these words would make awesome song lyrics ...like a prog song maybe... 'bleeds the colors of the sun' 'feast on her anguish' 'breathe sympathy' beautifully written carl
haha I really like prog rock a lot too. or maybe a nice post rock song since I am defiantly getting into godspeed you black emperor and explosions in the sky and that type of stuff. Poems are new to me, I usually write stories or opinion peices. but Thanks so much for your input!
