old ones

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by standingdeer, Dec 11, 2005.

  1. standingdeer

    standingdeer Member

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    Word is on fire and the spirits are making
    clouds part to reveal the dancing of eagles
    I shoulder the old ones who lean in so close
    they whisper everything I need to know

    Deer women laying her hands on my head
    as the hummingbird wishes the love that I have
    I become wind as it washes through notes that I make
    grandfather comes, waking the morning again


    A fire has started the will of my hand
    to write the words that belong to everyone
    can we balance the worlds once more
    with medicines


    Standingdeer
     
  2. TheMistress

    TheMistress Senior Member

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    you have a beautiful soul, standingdeer.
    I will be so lucky to meet you.
    :)
     
  3. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    very good, only thing I didn't like was the innatural line breaks

    please check out the poem I have posted on here
     
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