short and sweet!(i think...ha)

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by lithiumandweed, Dec 20, 2005.

  1. lithiumandweed

    lithiumandweed Member

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    Do you see the same as i do , do i see as you do?

    Do we see the same as others?

    With different eyes, different souls, and different minds... do we all see alike?

    Suffice to say that the only likeness between us all....Is that we all see with the same vagueness......
     
  2. OceanStar

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    nice! I like that. I like the fact that it's not complicated and it's a really cute lenght.

    peace.
     
  3. Mordiana

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    Jeah its cool :)
     
  4. lithiumandweed

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    right on, i wrote it at busstop like a week ago.....it was something i was actually really kinda just shit i was thinking about right then......ummm ..well i guess thats how most things get written..indeed!..someone has to think it before they can write it...same goes to the rest of the universe i suppose...
     
  5. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    I really like the sentiment you express here. Could maybe use some polishing/trimming so it reads smoother, but even if you don't it's still pretty good. :)
     
  6. lithiumandweed

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    thanks trippin...i think most the stuff i write could use a little polishing..but i dont know ...i guess i just leave it how it comes out..you know...thanks again
     
  7. Bhaskar

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    To see all in truth
    close eyes
    still mind
    breathe deep.

    Through every individual,
    through every division,
    through all that is and was
    the self alone exists everywhere
    the self in me, the self in all.
     

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