Mellow Yellow

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Lozi, Jan 5, 2006.

  1. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    Mellow Yellow

    Puffs of angry jets twist
    around the mellow haze,
    that which angelic corpses suck.
    Their days are numbered,
    but do they care?
    AS life is steadily
    plucked
    from their lungs.

    SO soothing so soothing
    each mending breath of fresh air,
    drawn in like the last meal,
    some heavy flume of gaseous death.
    Its scent lingers,
    like a predator upon its prey.
    Today is their last,
    though she doesn't know.
    With her yellow glinting eyes,
    and bruised eyebags.
    There sits inside amongst the tarmac-
    a ticking time bomb,
    belike a benign tumour, not sure.
    Gone.
    Many rellies cancerous,
    but you saw no connection.
    And down you go
    in your skeleton dress(like some wilting rose)
    whiffing past
    in your mellow yellow haze.
    Those were your days.
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    great work with this one, there's a great flow and the images are fresh... and the wind down towards the end was most excellent! I enjoyed this one much, thanks! :)
     
  3. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    thanks for commenting fulmah, much appreciated :)
     
  4. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    "And down you go
    in your skeleton dress(like some wilting rose)
    whiffing past
    in your mellow yellow haze"

    I love this part!! Yay Lozi, you rock, baby! :D
     
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