Everything is temporary all is sure to pass, This harsh world so fragile as if made of glass. A handful of sand and a bed made from grass, Nothing material was ever made to last. Hold tight to what you have, as time is slipping fast, Your futures still ahead of you, the past is in the past. Whets here today is temporary none was made to last, So remember that you don’t have an eternity And make each moment last.
hey man, ive got to tell ya, i love this poem. it sums up my feelings exactly. i wish i could find the words to give you total acceptance and inspiration for the future and to keep on doing what youre doing and writing. i feel this poem has a beautiful message and is beautifully written. truely a great job. would it be ok if i put this in a profile of mine or something. its simply beautiful. great job
I'm not sure I agree; "hold tight to what you have"? Why, if it's all going to pass? Shouldn't we be letting go and enjoying the moment? But, putting that difference of opinion aside, I liked your poem and think I understand where you're coming from. I wish you would have kept the rhyming up though. Oh, and also, it might be less redundant to say "...what's been is in the past" instead of "...what's past is in the past."
your one these people who likes to sound clever.keep trying.I cant see what you dont understand about that poem,unless your just a kid or something,,which would make sense. shouldnt call people wrong when you misread their poems.i`m not best speller,or grammer etc.but I know what i mean when I write it. "hold tight to what you have as time is slipping fast" by that and in its relation to the poem itself,i mean if you let go for a moment,.chances are you will loose it/her forever,and you cant turn back time.In my eyes you should hold tight to the one or thing you love and should appreciate it. People end up taking love or whatever they love for granted, and regret it!. do you appreciate anything? as you say in your post,, "Why, if it's all going to pass? Shouldn't we be letting go and enjoying the moment?" (did you read the poem atall?)..sounds like the words of a kid.someone not confident in themselves,maybe believe your not good enough to ever hold on to anything? do you ever appreciate love? or do you generally just use? and use words to get what you want, never really understanding what your saying, or meaning what you say for more then a moment..if atall? but your right about the "past is in the past" bit! lol.I had changed that on a newer one.but had copyed it from an old document..but im just gonna leave it like that here after your message.and its still an expression..in the uk people say the past is in the past (it is a bit dumb but hey, i can think of allot dumber things other countrys do and have done! (with america it usually invoves a few thousand lives!,lol). and even without the change its not reduntant,,Not to your high standard.,i mean,i couldnt live up to your expectations of retardedness as i was never inbred like you! ill have to read some of your poems you must be some poet,,you obviously love to criticize,so im expecting great things from you..coz guess what,i can criticize also. so ill have a look at your stuff..but difference is,im honest in my oppinions,and can back them up.even is my gramma is Shi* lol. cheers for the nice posts people appreciated. PS LOVE DONT HATE! I didnt mean to get overly defensive or too personal,its not even one of my fav poems,its one of first poems i ever wrote infact.but i just hate it when people use criticism to try and make themselves feel better about their own insecurities.. You should get ahead on showing that you are smart or tallented based on your own achievments.not by putting down others.. and your not always right.just remember that..noone is always right.take care people
Hey buddy, you're the one who's hating, calling me retarded and inbred. All I said is that I disagreed with the idea in your poem, I never said the poem itself was bad. Get a clue man, just because you wrote a poem doesn't mean everyone's going to agree with it. You also imply that I'm dishonest, which is exactly what I was NOT in my post, which was me stating my point of view. Really, it's you who's acting like a child, even making fun of my country which has nothing at all to do with anything in this thread. So, chill out man, I wasn't being offensive, don't get carried away. I never put you down, I never put your poem down; all I did was reply HONESTLY what I felt about it. You'd think a creative, honest, smart and talented person such as yourself might appreciate a diversity of comments.
sorry man. i might of been a bit harsh..just felt like you was someone i knew, a type of person. but i dont know you well enough to judge really.its unfair.i dont usually even bother to answer messages.guess i was in a bad mood. dont worry about it,just got eachother wrong.take care.
