new here- poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by sunkiss672672, Jul 19, 2004.

  1. sunkiss672672

    sunkiss672672 Member

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    hey everyone, i just got looking around and decided to share some stuff, lemme know what you think.







    How can you take this?


    Only knowing what hate is,

    and why aren’t you trying,

    and yearning to change this?


    Can’t you see the hurt in their eyes

    when you point and walk by,

    barely noticing they’re alive,

    uncovering their disguise?


    They hide behind the hate,

    the hate that you create.

    It seems you determine their fate,

    their smiles are nothing but fake.


    What if you were in their place,

    not always winning the race,

    not having the perfect face,

    would it surely change in your case?


    By the time you read this,

    will you remember their fate?

    By the time you read this,

    will you still have this hate?

    By the time you read this,

    can you really relate?

    Because by the time you read this,

    it’s surely too late.
     
  2. Nicole

    Nicole Member

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    Great poem, Sunkiss! The verses genuinely flowed well with one another, and your meaning came across wonderfully. I really enjoyed reading your poem, you should share some more, I‘d love to read them. The dismal truth here, is that hatred feeds hatred, but the ones who realize the cycle break it’s course. :)

     
  3. mebesideme

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    That was absolutely beautiful. You are a very natural writer, you can make words flow easily. I lok forward to more!
     

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