True Reality

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TheLizardKingMike, Jan 26, 2006.

  1. TheLizardKingMike

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    Cloud break
    Stratosphere sonnet
    The dust settles
    On the qualm of reason
    Alive
    Rise from the depths of elder forests

    The huts on the hills
    Passion overfills the ancient village
    This place has come of age
    Is now without time

    No future or past
    Only a spot on the line
    It is now
    And forever
    You are always here
    And it is always now
    The clock is only concept
    True reality
     
  2. sleepy_d777

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    jim would be mighty proud of ya if he could read those words...........if you ask me (and i am noone)............expand your vocabulary.........you have some talent there,i think.............peace
     
  3. TheLizardKingMike

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    Thanks. I know I need to get a thesaurus. I do find that I am limited by my word choice. But my best poem is no match for Morrison's worst. I'm not so sure he would be proud, but he is my biggest influence. I have written poems far better than this one. Thanks again. I appreciate your input.
     
  4. mrsmorrison27

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    well, no one will ever be as good as morrison, that is impossible, but i think this is a wonderul peice! just keep writing,
     
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  6. sleepy_d777

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    sorry,if you thought i was "comparing" your talent to jims. what i should of said was that, jim would be mighty flattered. i need to pay attention to how i word things! but anyway you still have potential,in my eyes...but i don't really know jack (smile)
     
  7. TheLizardKingMike

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    Thanks alot guys, it means a lot to me. I believe I have some talent too, this is my only one though.
     
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