High Hopes

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TheLizardKingMike, Feb 8, 2006.

  1. TheLizardKingMike

    TheLizardKingMike Members

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    Stand in the doorway
    Creep closely
    Again she froze
    Confusion closing
    Absent mind
    Quiver

    Short circuit
    Warped maze of wires
    Combustion
    Florescent flames

    Sunburst unprepared
    Came to clouds
    Flew too high
    Burn out

    Once more to soar
    With spirit torn
    The final flight
    To plummet to earth
    High hopes
     
  2. Tigerbeam

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    seems like too much imagery, not enough meaning.
     
  3. TheLizardKingMike

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    I know what you're saying. I like the juxaposition, and it does tell a sort of story. BUt I understand what you mean. Thanks for the reply.
     
  4. foundme

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    i like your quote but the poem is kinda confusing..but that doesn't mean it isn't good
     
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