Tracks in the Snow

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TrippinBTM, Mar 13, 2006.

  1. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Tracks in the Snow

    A man's track in the snow
    ever fades like the stars in the dawn
    buried in today's still-raging blizzard
    or melting in tomorrow's sun;
    but never do they last.

    Either filled over or dissolved,
    all trace of his life is destroyed;
    an ash here or a bone shard there
    may remain for others to see;
    but not forever.

    Bodies rot, memories fade,
    as we all flicker out like lamps in the night.
    Our stories forgotten, unwritten, unread
    the world carries on, wantonly living
    and remembers never her dead.
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Powerful work.... well done.

    While life is fragile and fleeting, gratitude fills the cup of the moment.
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    thank you for your comment, sylvan :)
     
  4. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    love this stanza in particular, but the whole thing was excellent. perfect. i enjoyed much! :)
     
  5. TheLizardKingMike

    TheLizardKingMike Members

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    Sad but true man, in the grand scheme of things everyone is forgotten. Even the legends of yesterday will be forgotten in time. Really nice work, keep on writing, I know I don't have to tell you to. You've got the spark of passion like the rest of us.
     
  6. bethy85

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    i really like it. i don't know what else to say. it simple (not in a bad way) and moving.
     
  7. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    Ah, so true, this memorial to our Sorrow. Yet, I will remark, more in compliment than contradiction: That man may make tracks in the snow is evidence of the undying flow of that Force which animates him.

    :)
     
  8. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Quite true, osiris. Thank you, and everyone, for your kind words :)
     
  9. SvgGrdnBeauty

    SvgGrdnBeauty only connect

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    I like this... great imagery. :)
     
  10. dirty_boots

    dirty_boots Member

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    Wow great work. I love a poem that makes you think. Well done :)

     
  11. CrucifiedDreams

    CrucifiedDreams Members

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    I read this over a couple of time.
    I find it really powerful, totally connected with it.
    Good stuff :)
     
  12. scratcho

    scratcho Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    First time in poetry--shall return for works like yours trippin'.Most evocative!Thanks-----------scratcho-------
     
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