I'm really crap at this but here goes...

Keep Dreaming

Whole wide world knows how

To throw a small copper coin

Into a flowing fountain of hope

And make a half-believed wish



Everyone has grand visions

Their wish will LOL come true

And we cast further pennies

In the already crowded water



Many coins with many dreams

Waiting for a kind lending ear

What a pity that those wishes

Were oblivious of each other

 

i like that- thats cute. i never thought of it that way- a wishing well filled with unfufilled hopes and dreams... i like it.

 

I'm sure that some of the more experienced poets will be able to word it better than me, but I thought I'd give it a little bash anyway.

 

The only thing i didn't like about it was the "LOL", besides that I thought it was pretty damn good. Don't be so hard on yourself

 

Thanks TBTM. I'm not being hard though, I'm just being honest. With so many words and so many combinations to choose from, I think it's quiet difficult to collect them and write them down to express how we each feel. Even more difficult to share them. I guess some people can get better with practice, but poetry is one of the most ancient art forms so I would need a few lifetimes to catch up with some of the poets in here

 

Nah, just need practice. Read lots of poetry, write lots of poetry. Read with your heart, by the way, not just your brain. Let it sink in, ya know? Same thing for writing. Also, if you don't like how you composed your poem...rewrite it. It's your poem. I hope this helps.

 

cool idea, I like the simplicity of this one.

 

I liked it, though I too could have done without the "LOL." You have a very simple but powerful way with words, keep writing. You'll only get better with practice.

 

Whole
Wide
World -
LOL:
a link, a flow all your own.
I like!

 

Thanks everyone. Very useful advice and positive vibes. Looking at the poetry in this forum helps to open up the mind, but I will also need some divine inspiration to write another one, so I'll wait until the universe hits me with something. Hopefully it won't be a comet.