she said nothing can hold me down

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  1. mrsmorrison27

    mrsmorrison27 yoda piss

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    and ill take my last breathe under the pressure of your lungs
    ill take a spill in your blood
    under terror of love
    under the melody of hate
    because of pain inside a slit wrist
    inside the escape of a pill bottle
    or the drowned sorrows in the empty vodka bottle
    im never coming back the surface
    ill drown in this empty forever
    this empty eternity i embody
    i cant keep living something that dosnt want to be lived
    i cant put this down on paper anymore
    instead
    i think ill write it on my wrists
     
  2. make art not war

    make art not war Member

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    Very violent, but I really liked it...it brings back memories.
     
  3. mrsmorrison27

    mrsmorrison27 yoda piss

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    well i wrote it the night i tried to kill myself so of course its violent
     
  4. flowersinmyhair

    flowersinmyhair Member

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    I read the whole thing, but I think the first line is very good.
     
  5. marquis_de_odde

    marquis_de_odde Member

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    Amazing,especially the last lines "i cant put this down on paper anymore
    instead i think ill write it on my wrists"
     
  6. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    And you'll keep writing it and re-writing it for all of blessed eternity, an everlasting tragedy, until "you" are slain and GOD remains; an effervescent, all-encompassing motherfuck.

    To the Pure Observer, Tragedy is just as Beautiful as Comedy. They are, indeed, the very same. When one learns to observe one's self, One ceases to view life as something to be thrown aside.

    Best of luck, and fortune, to you.

    :)
     
  7. Forgotten-holocaust

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    wow love it love it love it love it
     

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