Help With Lyric Writing

Discussion in 'Performing Arts' started by reincarnatmenowK, Apr 23, 2006.

  1. reincarnatmenowK

    reincarnatmenowK Member

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    Here is a song I wrote about my current relationship ..( thank the heavens for )...

    Do you see anything that you would change on this ... ?? I wan't to submit it, but I want to be sure .. any opinions ?

    With you-I don’t remember any suffering days

    The first time I saw you I didn’t know what say.

    I was sure that I saw forever in your eyes.

    With you-you brought the color back to my days.

    Before then my life was full of sorted lies in disguise.



    Running; there is nothing to stop me from coming to you.

    With you I want to spend the rest of-our days.



    At first you resisted me and I resisted your truth,

    but now I know there is no truth better than you

    Opened my eyes and now I can see again

    And I’m

    Running; there is nothing to stop me from coming to you.

    With you I want to spend the rest of-our days



    With You-

    You’re the one that feels so right-(whispers)

    Copyright © 2006 Spaded Heart. All Rights Reserved.

    K
     
  2. Almost_Lost

    Almost_Lost Member

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    Thats really good.. i don't think theres anything to change, it sounds fine as it is.
     
  3. HikerHauk

    HikerHauk Banned

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    nice! just follow thy heart
     

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