Paralysis When I was home, all I dreamed of was being away, anywhere. When I was away, all I thought about was being back home. The trips and traps of my mind do not allow me to move forward or even backwards. I am stuck, stagnant and indecisive, a deer in the headlights of life. Who shall kick me in the ass and tell me to go? Self-determination is a blessing; but also a curse to the paralyzed mind. And what shall become of the prisoner who is scared to death of release?
I love it, the language is so blunt and sensical, And it holds the idea so well. "The trips and traps of my mind" what a gem.
That was amazing man. It's kind of like something Morrison said, something about how people want have freedom so much but are afraid of letting go of their chains. I'm too lazy to go look it up. This was a truly wonderful piece. Bring me more.
"Who shall kick me in the ass and tell me to go?" The epitaph(sp?) of the Indecisive Man. Very well done!
excellent work there Trippin! Loved the concise execution of thoughts within the theme you're exploring. The opening stanza as well as the last were my favorites. The only distraction I had was with the deer in the headlights... if I had any critique to offer it'd be losing "the deer" and reworking the last two lines in that stanza... probably like: I am stuck in headlights, stagnant and indecisive. Great stuff!
Thanks fulmah, I'm thinking you may be right. I kind of like the line, but at the same time don't. Damn indecision...
