this is my poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Quality, May 23, 2006.

  1. Quality

    Quality Banned

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    fake responses i don't care for
    this is my poem

    i can make every line rhyme

    what are you going to do about it
    ignore it; one less butt sniffer i have to put up with
    you can be a follower
    bet you will smell the path i burn in the grass
    when you least expect

    it creeps up and bites in the ass

    there is sores on your hands from trying to grasp this
    not yours
    this is my poem
     
  2. lady_dreamcatcher

    lady_dreamcatcher Local Cannibal

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    well, besides some gramatical errors, and a lack of any and all punctuation (mind you, this is a personal preference... i find it makes a poem easier to read), i rather enjoyed this. really love (like i said, besides the gramatical errors....) the third line from the bottom. very nice! tanks for sharing!
     
  3. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    I personally didn't like it at all
     
  4. lady_dreamcatcher

    lady_dreamcatcher Local Cannibal

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    when why even bother responding? didn't your mother ever tell you that if you can't say something nice, don't say anything at all?
     
  5. Pinecone

    Pinecone Member

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    well, I don't think one should hold back from saying they don't like it unless the person asks for no criticism. After all, it was posted in a free speech forum. :p

    but anyway, I doubt the author cares, at least that's what I got from the poem.
    I kind of like the idea of it, except if I wrote something like that, I'd probably try to be more secific about why i don't care what some people think instead of using generic name calling. you know what i mean? Then again, maybe that just shows how much you really don't care. You don't have to take time to justify it in words. Whatever you write, even if some of the meaning comes from between the lines, it's still there. Still, no offense, but it's just not to my taste.
     
  6. Duck

    Duck quack. Lifetime Supporter

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    my mother also told me to be honest :D

    in the poem himself he says he doens't care about criticism, fuck it, why not tell him?
    I was gentle even, I could have said "it's a pile of shit, and if you would call that poetry you should be raped then burned alive" but I was nice about it
     
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