Big Sur (studio version) Reprise

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by stalk, May 25, 2006.

  1. stalk

    stalk Banned

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    I like muddy echoes.
    They barely make it
    'cross the river
    only to be reflected
    back by the forest on
    the other side.
    Those obese squirrels conspiring-
    I LOATHE
    as they chit-chat
    behind my curled back
    with Blue Jays,
    and so many spiders.​

    I LOVE watching them

    all​

    degather like some
    fluttering mandala
    somehow making
    Sound .

    O the sorcery of butterflies
    trailing thru thin air
    as every moment surrounds itself
    with a ripple,
    or an Echo.

    Omar,
    whatever you do-
    There's an observer on the wing
    of your whirlwind
    strings,​

    Meditate on Sensory Decay ||


    I wonder if I've ever thought about you​


    pounding on my auratic shell


    I watch outside explosions of sacrament​


    Xenrej's Orbsycli


    Forgot I had teeth
    Panning for thoughts
    Visions of eyes
    In fire​
     
  2. lady_dreamcatcher

    lady_dreamcatcher Local Cannibal

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    the second half really sped up for me. the first seems to meander along, calm and quiet, and then the second part... BOOM! wake up! and what an excellent ending, my friend! a real punch... but my favourite part, i must admit, was...

    O the sorcery of butterflies
    trailing thru thin air

    bravo!!
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

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    Well, I liked the first "big sur" but this was fantastic. I like the ending a lot too, lady dreamcatcher said it all in her post. Though, I don't know who Omar is, or what Xenrej's Orbsycli means.
     
  4. stalk

    stalk Banned

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    My poetry's personal,
    but it's up to you to interpret it! (that's why art's so beautiful)
    Thank you both for the input,
    I love when others love
    what I've converted.

    Omar. Alfredo Rodriguez-Lopez
    is one of the best guitarists alive right now. :*
     
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    stalk Banned

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    Wow, it's funny-
    I wrote the beginning when I was just high, by the river,
    and later on I wrote the rest
    when I was on acid,
    by the same river.
    and O YES
    things were faster . .
     
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