calm and cool air fills the room, with the dissapearance of his face. round figures reflect specs of light, moving at a very distant pace. capturing him is not easy to do, lock him away before he locks you. one trick to this minind fellow, is to teach him how to lose.
I think its an intersting poem, but the seperation of the first line from the others sort of threw me off. I understand the second stanza in relation to the title, but the first is more image based and a little disconnected. Don't get me wrong I think you write well, but a sense of anger or resentment doesn't seem to be displayed. Overall, the poem was good and I urge you to keep it up!
yeah the first line wasnt supposed to be separated... i dont know it just kinda showed up like that after i posted it. sry
