this is my poem please tell me it's fantastic

my tears and my pain and my problems
the incredible tragedy of my relationship
the unbearable emptiness that no one understands
the fact i am beautiful after he hits
i don't even feel it
i don't even know it
it doesn't exist
there is nothing

 

hahahaha! ..as a joke -- i think it's quite humerous. then again, my sense of humor is a tad twisted. kind of a mock-oetry. social commentary on those who need to have their ego's stroked?

either way, this poem totally changed my life. i feel more whole. more human. thanks for sharing. i'm going to go plant a garden.

 

its fantastic
keep writing

 

thank you so much for saying it's fantastic!!! I will keep writing!! I promise!

 

I like it.
It's good poetic style.
Subject -matter is a little ambiguous & stygian.

 

I really did not like that poem. However, that fact that I don't like the poem might, in fact, make the poem perfect.

 

thank you and yes it does

 

Hey man great peom. I liked it alot.

 

seven responses! I am a genius!

to all of my fans... I promise another poem in the near future!

 

I think it's pretty good. love to hear more!

Peace and love