I have to stop and wonder, could this be it, Kids starving in hunger, and we’ve got a war for profit, If there’s nothing to rebel against today, You must have your head turned the other way, A time like the 60’s need to be brought back again, A time when the youth tells the government to put down weapons, Bush told me, Rejoice we’ve got a victory, But how can we call it victory when people are still dying? Innocent lives constantly being lost, Welcome to the American holocaust, Welcome to the new American dream, With big houses and water that isn’t clean, With a television in 98% of our living rooms, Showing our youth violent cartoons, Explaining how I can have any girl I want, Just by using a corporate product, With our young women staring at a screen, Were they see women that are so lean, They’ll cut themselves trying to be the American dream, And the men who see these women, Go out seeking after them, Passing up all the beauty that they’ve missed, Trying to achieve that corporate sex wish, But no one looks that way… its not even healthy, But still we buy products that benefit the wealthy, Benefiting them going to war, Even though deep down we know what we’re fighting for, In iraq for peace? How come we didn’t send teachers and priests? I’m on 17 and not that smart, But I know peace is not blowing childrens house’s apart, I wonder if CEO’s even have a conscience, Looking in there eyes that are filled with arrogance, Do they really just not care? That they’re wrecking lives everywhere, But we still can change the way we think, Maybe I’ll change your mind with my paper and ink, I’m not saying go out and be a anarchist, Just stop to think before you support blindness, The American dream has truly changed, Our whole country’s minds are now deranged.
Peace, you know your poem has a good message. but try not to stress it to mak ryme ok. let it come naturaly. i wrote a poem in the old hipsters forum under the post very anti war poem and just by letting it flow helps. i love your message and i believe it. the American Dream has cheanged. but most americans dont want to believe it! later teh waking up flower child
i like the message your giving, i think the poem is wonderful, but my honest opion (and please dont take offense) is that you should try to cover up what your trying to say a little bit, so people have to really think about it, i personally think that when i read a poem i like to have to think about it for awhile, then when i understand what it means, it really gets me excited, like jim morrison!!! peace and love
It's heartening to know that you think this way and can see beyond the American curtain... but it's disheartening that we HAVE to realize the terrible truths that are hidden from us... and infuriating when we start to think about it.
I really liked that poem, and I agree with everything SunFree said. I liked how it rhymed, I was reading it to myself and I felt like a street poet. Good job
