Climb up my tree tonight. I want to see your face in my window. Be careful when you climb in. Last time, your pants snagged on the lock. Pull down the comforter. I`ve warmed up your side for you. Rest your head of my pillow. I always wanna feel your breath tickling my neck. Grasp my hand under the sheets. Entangle those rough fingers with mine. Lay with me tonight. I`ll rest in the crooks of your body. I`ll go to the bathroom at 4 am. I`ll come back to see you sleeping, quietly snoring. I know this is love.
Another good poem! I love the images of you two lovers sharing a bed together. Another image that I can relate to when my bf and I lived together. Great work! I'ld love to see more. Peace
I think you imagery is like spot on as I’m reading your poem its like I can see it happening right in front of me…… this to me was comedy "Be careful when you climb in. Last time, your pants snagged on the lock" i like the way the poem stared off and progressed and ended off with a hard and memorable end.
This is very dreamlike and yet real. As if reality and your wishes are interweaving and the boundary is hazy. I liked the humour added. It gives the piece character. Also little details, like warming up a spot and going to the bathroom, work to create the atmosphere and set up the mood. And of course the last line is total winner for me. Great ending!
I liked this alot. The emotion is conveyed in imagery, and the little details add up to conclude in the last line. Wonderful work!
